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Anonymous
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Thumper's Corner.....THE MOVIE ......cONT,
sORRY, i WAS RUNNING BEHIND. i HAVE NOT CHECKED FOR MISSPELLED WORDS OR READ THIS OVER AT ALL, PLEASE EXCUSE
When last we left, ABM and his family were waiting on a phone call from the Hospital. ABM's son's medical condition had turned for the worst and members of his family had given blood samples for testing in case theirs were needed.
The scene opens with an outside view of Genesis Hospital. The scene shifts to a closeup of what appears to be two large hospital doors. The camera pulls back and a sign above the door reads "Kidney-Liver Unit". The scene shifts to the insides of the door. The background music is that of a fast paced piano. The door swings opens and we see the family rushing in with ABM leading the way. We see ABM's pace quickenS separating him from his family, as he yells back to his wife, Crystal, telling her that he is going to check in on his son and for her and the kids to try and find the doctor. In The next scene the music has softened to a light slow violin as we see ABM peeking his head into his sons room. The camera pans around the room. We see flowers and cards sitting on a window seal. There's a picture of "jesus" hanging on wall next to a small visiter's seat. The camera stops on ABM's son lying motionless in the bed. The camera switches back to a closeup view of a hurt looking ABM. The camera pulls back to show ABM walking very slow towards his son. ABM and his son, whom everyone calls Hooked. We see via flashbacks that he and his son are very close. In one scene we see them playing catch in the backyard. In another we see them at a football stadium rooting for their favorite team, the Philadelphia Eagles. In yet another we see them exchange "high-fives" upon catching a fish. Hooked has often refered to his father as his best friend. The scene returns to ABM standing over his son looking down on him in a hurt and loving way. The scene shifts to a closeup of ABM's face as the quite sounds of a organ plays in the background, sometimes interupted with the requests for doctors coming over the load speakers. The sounds stop, the room is quite, a tear rolls down his face.
Next we see ABM's wife rushing towards him with what appears to be a doctor while he's standing outside his son's room. His wife walks over to him. Seeing the hurt and tears still on his face, she gently reaches out, their hands meet and she slowly caresses his with her other hand. The camera pans over to a view of the other children, they too begin to cry. The camera pulls back to a view of them all as ABM composes himself. The camera switches to a view of ABM reaching his hand out towards the man in a white hospital uniform as he says, "hello **pause** and you are"? **looking at the man in a questioning way**
The man replied, "oh I'm sorry, my name is Vincent, I work in the lab, I've never meet you before but the doctor said someone was coming by for the test results. The man continued, " I don't know if the doctor told all of you but" ** the man stops talking while fumbling through papers in his hand** The man continues talking " "I'll tell you what", he said in a positive tone, "who is ABM?". ABM raises his hand while saying, "I am". The lab tecnition then said, " I am sorry Mr. ABM but didn't the doctor tell you that only family members could be used, your blood does not match". The music heightens as we see a closeup view of a shocked and wide-eyed looking ABM. His eyes shifts towards his wife. She looks back with a frightened and scared look. The camera shifts between closeups of all the family members, all having a look of disbelief and bewilderment. The last scene shows a closeup of ABM closing his eyes and dropping his head. The camera fades to black.
The next scene finds us in another hospital. The camera pans the room. There are machines everywhere. Monitors are beeping. As the camera continues around the room we notice an oscilloscope with an even sinewave pattern. The camera stops and focuses on an oxygen tank. The camera follows the tube leading from the tank up to a patient lying in a bed. The camera pulls outs to a wider view showing us a patient with numerous tubes and wires attached to them.We then hear the signwave monitor emit a steady loud tone.
The next scene opens in darkness, we hear the sounds of soft slow music, it's the unmistakable sounds of Luther Vandross. The room starts to brighted as we hear a slow moan "oooooouuuuuu" **pause** "aaahhhhhhh" . It's a women's voice we hear, it appears to be the sounds of ecstasy. We again hear a long drawn out "oooooooohhh, ooooooohhhhh". The room is lighter now. We see a view of two individual locked in deep moments of sex. Again we hear a groan type sound coming from the women, " oooooooouuuuuu oooooooouuuuu" Their rythum was slow and easy. the womens moans of passion become louder. We hear "ohh ohh gawd damn! oooohhh don't stop, don't stop". A male voice is heard saying, " I ain't stoppin' baby, I know what you like" .Almost in tears, the women continued "that's it! oh shit! that's it baby!" The man's pace quickened. Screams of passion poured from the women as she dug her nails deep into Thumper's back. "OH Gawd Damn", she cried, "right there, right there oouu right there" she wimppered with her eyes half closed as if in another world. Yukio could never make her feel like this, Linda thought between sounds of joy. She had experimented with other women while in the Army but nothing serious, not until Yukio come along did she admit that she loved the touch and the gentle ways of another women . But nevertheless she was still confused, every since she had moved to Indianapolis and meet Thumper her life has not been the same. We learn that Thumper is crazy about Linda but feels cheated by Linda's time spent with Yukio. Thumper is considered by many to be a playboy, a man about town, But Linda had difinitely changed that. The Camera zooms in to a closeup of Thumper's face. He is sweating profusely. The camera switches to Linda as she yells, "take it! take it! take this P*&^y, it's yours daddy"! Thumper's back archs, as he yells out "this is mine, I own this". Linda lets out a sream. The camera fades to black.
The next scene finds use back at the hospital, we see a closeup view of the signwave on the machine, it falls flat, the camera switches to Yukio as she yells out "Nurse,,,NURSE...SOMEBODY! The camera pulls back and out the window as we hear Yukio's crys for help.
The next few scenes is a secession of shots again showing people at their PC's. But this time it's not one of the regulars. The first shot is of E. Lynn Harris, the best selling black author. He's at his PC typing away. We then see a closeup view of the monitor, it's Thumper's Corner. E. Lynn stops typing and stands up shaking his head back and forth, then we hear him say, "naw I ain't going to post that, that fool ABM ain't going to get a chance to jump on me like he did my girl Jane (the author of black erotica).
The scene changes to a shot of Van Whitfield, then to the author Walter Moseley, the acclaimed author of The Devil In The Blue Dress and Fearless Jones. He too is sitting at his type writer. We see him laugh as the view again shows us his monitor, it too is parked on Thumper's Corner. The camera pulls back as we hear him say, "That Thumper's corner is something else" "I'd like to meet that Cynique".
The scene then shifts through multiple shorts of various writers sitting at their PC reading posts on Thumper's corner. We see Van Whitfield, Bernice Mcfadden (we learn that she sat in on a chat with Thumper and his crew), a quick shot of Barbara Neely is seen. Toni morrison, Guy Johnson, April Sinclair and Heather Neff are all seen laughing and shaking their heads while viewing Thumper's Corner.
The next scene opens with a view of Chris Driving his car Through the streets of St Louis. He appears to have a content look on his face....for now. The scene shift backwards, we now find Chris at home, a nice upscale home. Chris is laying on the bed, he appears to be in pain. Chris's pain was indiscribable, unbearable. As the camera moves in to a closeup of Chris's face we hear him say, " I can't do this, I just can't think of a way to get to the other side". HIs mind was in constant confusion, constant pain. although he had traveled this way before and somehow managed to weather the storm, self doubt now began to rule. Intellectually he knew this doubt, fear and confusion where syptoms of withdrawal yet inteligence was no match against the isolating, brutally cold, depression latent, suicide inducing, dark moments of withdrawal. He knew that in a couple of days the pain would subside, yet he couldn't bear thinking of living another 5 minutes under these conditions."hold it" Chris said to himself, "your not going to die". Maybe this will not go away, he thought. He had had intense withdrawals that have gone on for weeks and that memory seemed to be the prevailing thought a the moment. He couldn't sleep, or when he did it was an exhausted state of uncounciousness only to quickly awaken in a fit of confusion accompanied by a sense of impending doom. Every thought is laced with fear, every moment is seemingly extended 10 fold. Comfort and a sense of well being are foreign to him now. The sockets of his eyes are sore, his legs ache, his back felt as if it could not support himself much longer, so he laid there withering in pain. Deep depression sets in, suicide passes by. Death is now an option. "I don't want to think anymore" he says to himself, "I don't want to "be", I don't know what to do" he says crying in pain. He was sweating but yet he was cold. He was beaten, he was a weakened and pittiful man. "I know what I can do" Chris said to himself in a trembling weak voice. Consciously he knew that if he lessoned the pain by doing any amount of his drug of choice he would only prolong the inevitable, he would only be borrowing time. Someone has said that our doubts are our traitors and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt. Chris keep saying that over and over along with a few prayers. He is now smothered in quilt, fear, worry, dissolutionment. The waves of emotions are ever present each fighting to see which one will drive him over the edge. They work in unison, darting in and out of his mind, some stopping long enough to drive him to sceam out "HELP ME, PLEASE GOD, HELP ME". Hope is but a hollow word in the dictionary. The camera widen to a shot of Chris sitting up in the bed. We see him pat himself as if to see if he's still there, still alive. As the camera pulls back to a full view of the room we hear Chris thinking to himself, he's think his conscience is still working that small voice that differentiates between right and wrong. We learn that Chris is what known as a functioning Herion addict, he has been one most of his life but since his new book hit the best sellers list his habit has gone out of control. The scene changes back to Chris in his car, then a tight shot of the back view of his car. The camera pulls back to expose an apparent drug spot. the scene changes to a shot of Chris rolling up his sleeve, a closeup of his arms show tracks. We see a needle penatrate his arm. The scene fades to black.
Thumper's Corner THE MOVIE cONT. |
Mad Mama
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UUuuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmm..Uhn!
Uhn, UHN, uh
I knewd yall was some sick folks at Thumper's Corner. I caint wait for the next installment.
Hope it won't be next month.
And Thumper be hump'n ha? I ain't surprised, but that Linda. She sure is different from the act she puts on round here. All sweet and business like.
Yeah tell us anything. Little horny heffa.
I feel bad for ABM though. I'm going to set my prayers on him cause Crystal don't deserve no good man like him. He ought go find Kola, but then again, she a bigger slut than Crystal. Ain't no tell'n who her kids is by.
I knewd Chris was on something by way he post. You read him and Carey, they both on something talkk'n bout "pull my finger". Yeah. That's drug slang but they thank we don't know it.
If E. Lynn Harris reading tonight, then hellow E. Lynn from Dorthea. Your biggest fan. Holla back now.
Thumper know he aint had no business writ'n them bad reviews of E. Lynn's work. Gifted as that man is and sells 1 million copies evrytime he come out the box.
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Mad Mama
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Yall ain't gone worry me.
I caint wait see what Cynique be doin.
And let me tell you somethin, ANONYMOUS. Don't you put me in this mess.
I am a spectator and a Preacher's daughter. Do not drag my name up in that mess.
Uhhhhhnnn-Uh-UHN!
Yall ain't gone worry me.
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Anonymous
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Hello All
Boy o Boy, ain't that something about ABM's situation? Linda and Thumper, who would have thought it. And Chris, No wonder he's always cool and collected, he's sur'nuff got ahold of a tiger.
Lets check in on Carey.
I wasn't thinking, I could have posted a scene at a time. I think I will do that, what do you think?
Thumper's Corner......THE MOVIE Cont,
The scene opens with the closeup of a twirling red warning light. The camera pulls out to reveal an ambulence.
There are people milling about in the street. As the camera pans we see a reporter off in the distance. The camera zooms in on the reporter as we hear her say, "Are we ready to roll, come on Red get that camera over here. Red didn't like being bossed around by a pinched nose white women but he needed this job. He was lucky to get it since he had just been released from prison.
The camera finds the reporter talking to a young black man dressed in a pair of baggy jeans and a sweatshirt. The sweatshirt had writing on it that read, " Danger, Educated Black man Inside". The camera closes in on head shots of the reporter and the youth. She nods at Red looking for a cue to start. Red says "rolling". The reporter asks the young man, " Tell us, do you know what's happened"? The camera closes in on the youth as he says, "Yeah, yeah sure I do. See Mr. Carey stays up in there and somebody shot him trying to steal his money". The camera switches to the reporter, she asks, "how do you know that" the youth replied, "know what?" the reporter looked at the youth disappointedly and said, "how did you know there was money in there. The camera pulls back to a shot of Carey's house as the two continued. The youth is heard saying. "Everybody in the neighborhood knew Mr. Carey was tight and didn't spend no money and kept it all hiddin in the house. Every since his wife passed away we ain't seen much of him and we's thankin' somebodys dun gone up in there thinkin' he wasn't home and they kilt him cause we know it wouldn't give up the money, no sir, you was gonna have to kill him to get dat".
The scene changes to a shot of the outside of the ambalence, the camera zooms in. we see two people working frantically trying to save Carey's life. The next scene is of the reporting with another person, this time it's a haggered looking women wearing a robe and nothing on her feet. The camera Zooms in on the women. A closeup shows the women missing most of her teeth, her eyes are bloodshot red. We pickup the conversation, " Dats what happen", the women said, " we'd been seeing white gurls goin' in and out of ol'man Carey's house foe long time, he been ill lately, heard sumtin bout he felled in a big hole whiles he was pressing his close" "then dem white guurls that been running in and outs of der robs him when he was in bed casue like i'd said he'd been ill". Just then a voice from behind the women said "Don't listen to her, she don't know what she's talking about" the reporter asks him who he is and what was the real story. The man stepped around the barefoot women and said he didn't know what really happened but that his wife had it all wrong. he said that Carey had been depressed since his wifes passing and had fallen on bad times. he said carey didn't fall down while pressing clothes.
Then we see a clean cut looking brother walk up to the reporter and said he was Carey's brother in law. The camera zooms in on the face of the reporter while she asks, "do you know what happened. The camera pans over to the brother and he says, "yes I do, Carey tried to take his own life" The camera pulls back slowly. The final shot is a long view of the neighborhood and the ambulance riding away with it's flashing and siren blaring . The camera fades to black.
The next scene finds two women sitting in a diner. One has her face in her hands, she appears to be crying. the other is sitting in an attentive fashion while lightly stroking the crying womens hair. The camera zooms in as the crying women raises her head and pulls her hands from her face. It cynique, her makeup is running and her hair is a mess. The camera switches to the other women, it's Mad Mama. "listen girl" she says, "why you doing all this cryin', you is worrying ol'Mama, tells me what on your mind child, is them folks at that Thumper's corner gots you all worked up again"?. The camera view is of Cynique now. She stares at Mad Mamma for a while then says, " Big Mad Mama, I am in trouble, I'm pregnant"! The camera switches to a closeup view of a surprised looking Mad Mama. Mad Mama then says, "first of all, I don't knows where you got the Big Mad Mama shit from, my name is Mad Mama, period. Now baby child everything gonna be alright". The camera switches back to Cynique as she says, "no mama I can't have no babies, not now". Mama asks her why and Cynique tell her about the affair she's been having with a bookstore owner named Book Father, Some people call him IN PRINT. Mad Mama tells her that that's some strange sounding names but her husband don't have to know about the other man. We now see a closeup view of Cynique, she has a blank look on her face. Her eyes slowly move in the direction of Mad Mama and she says, " Mad Mama, I CAN'T have this baby, my husband he would kill me if he found out about Book father and you see ****pause*** here's the problem, my husband has had the operation, he can't have any more children". The camera zooms in tighter on Cynique, we see nothing but her eyes as the music's pace increases and the camera fades to black.
Thumper's Corner........THE MOVIE continues |
Chris Hayden
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Chris Hayden, hooked on skag.
I don't know, seems so 20th Century, so everyday, so utterly vulgar and common a depravity to fit me.
Of course you know, Anonymous, that this means war. |
Mad Mama
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Neh I toll that sucker not to put me up in this mess.
(Mouth clenched shut--staring in his damn face)
Uhn-Uh.
That's alright cause you still got to meet the good lord one day and he gone show you the letter of complaint I wrote when you git up there.
damn nigga!
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Carey
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Hey Chris, at least you're still alive. I am fighting for my life from a self inflicted gun shot wound  .
ANONYMOUS: can we bargain for a dream sequence? Say it ain't so.
I'd like to know who Big Mama is, she's really into this (LOL) |
Hooked
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Yaaaaaaaayyyyyy
I'm in the story.
I'm in the story!
Hooray for Anonymous!!
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Anonymous
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Hello Hooked
See there, I told you to chill and I'd take care of you. Tell me, I need a little feedback. Is the story to grim, you think people would rather see the characters moving around with smiles on their faces? I get the sense that Chris doesn't like his role. It just amazes me how detached the postees are to their characters. Then again, it is akin to how involved viewers become with their favorite soap. I tried to give it a slice of realness, maybe it's too real, I wonder what others think....Troy?...Thumper? I know ABM is game, he just seems like he can bounce with whatever. I had intended to post other scenes but I cut/re-wrote them. I really hate the dream stuff they do in many stories, that's like slapping the viewers in the face IMO. Aside from the subject matter, are the scenes moving along? How would some of you (Regulars), like to see your characters develope? I'd like to know before I post the next episode. It's ready but I don't know???? |
Girl Writer
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The biggest mistake any writer of a soap or novel or play can ever make...is to ask the Audience what they want.
You have to show them what they want.
People "want"...what they weren't expecting.
The MOVIE is moving along very fine...the scenes are breezy, funny and sensationalized. Everybody is totally different from what they are in real life.
Of course, the posters like Carey, Chris and Cynique are very "sophisticated" readers/thinkers, so they're too high nosed to really comment on the goings on...especially so early.
You seem to favor the women by making them attractive...but have made the men (other than Thumper) into weaklings and losers. That's probably not going well with them...but a good writer knows how to draw the crowd back in and how to revive interest.
It's not hard to do.
I'm sure Chris, Carey and ABM would like to read about their studly qualities and their good deeds--or just be a plain good evil villain.
I find it amusing and cliffhanger-ish so far...BUT
the only thing losing you readers is that you take too long to post the stories...for instance...you should post a whole 10 pages at a time (maybe every 2 days) to get people really INVOLVED.
You should definitely NOT
NOT ask people for advice on how to write or develop THEIR CHARACTERS...otherwise, it'll become a boring vanity filled love fest.
Trust me...even mad as hell...people will tune in to see what "THEY" did next. Chris can't resist!
But the pieces you give are too short. Just as it gets interesting and gets a flow....there's no hook. It's not enough to really involve the reader. It's like those old 15 minute soap operas in the 1950's. Remember that--when Guiding Light and Search for Tomorrow were 15 minutes long?
But housewives had no where else to go in those days.
Nowadays, everyone here is busy, many are working on their own manuscripts.
So you need to get people "hooked" and just let your imagination soar and wander. Good stuff is irresistable.
Tune everyone out...and write it how you want to, but ENGAGE us with your imagination and create more dimensions to the regulars.
You've got Mad Mama drooling and believing what you've written I see!!
Get the show going!
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ABM
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I apologize in advance if the following offends anyone. But now, really, yawl should know by now I am INCAPABLE of controlling myself.
Anonymous:
THANK YOU!
I gottah say I hope that you are copyright protecting this prior to posting it. 'Cause to me, it's a keeper!
This is truly a GIFT! Really! I am diggin' your soaper so much, I feel slightly embarrassed that I am able to read it fo' FREE...and without commercial interruptions.
Please, keep it coming!
What a riveting bit of storytelling! Part pathos, part suspense, part comedy all delightfully blended together. This reminds me of something that I might write, if I could finally get the right dosage of Ritalin to curb my ADHD.
I of course especially appreciate the inclusion of Yours Truly as one of the primary characters. <<humbly_bowing>>
I can't imagine that anyone would be offended by your story. Because it's too funny to take too seriously.
I think it's fun that you kinda suckah punched my character. Because, Heck! I'm thinking since the 'randy' ABM probably dun' made other dudes haftah face the same predicament, he was owed a comeuppance. HAHAHA!!!
But seriously. Hmmm??? <<headscratchin'>>
You know. The last part of the tribulations of my fictional alter ego have made me think seriously about something: Why IS IT every time our studly mailcarrier slithers by, he winks at my wife and says to my youngest daughter, "How's MY little girl doing?"
HAHAHA!! (Hey, wait a minute. Dat ain't funny!)
Actually, I was really feeling sorry for the paternity-challenged ABM...til I got a look see at what you had in store for Chris and Carey.
JEEZ! You really trained your crosshairs on those 2 schmoes!
What happened 'tween you and dem, anyway? Did they say "Yo Mama!" or something?
HAHAHA!!!
But, well, at least SOMEbody got to put in a lil T.A.P. time. Gawn n' lay the law down, Thumper! (RUFF! RUFF! DAWG!) 'Cause, frankly, I think yo' homey Linda was more than a wee bit 'pastdue'.
Rap Break: "Yeah! Yeah! Yeah! Ah Thump Mastuh! Yu gottah BLASTuh! Cut it FASTuh! And make it LASTuh!"
Oh! One mo' thing, Anonymous! Now that Yukio has been thrown overboard by the sexually-ambivalent Linda, you think that maybe ol' ABM can convince our lovely and erudite sapphite to 'switch teams'...too? <<wink!>>
Hey Mad Mama (which, BTW, is apparently for YOU is an apropos 'handle', indeed):
HOLY MOLY!
Okay. Don't you think NOW'S the time to refill that Tourettes Syndrome suppressant prescription?
Chris/Carey:
Hey, I knew you guys had problems, but DAYUM!
Chris:
I told you 'Angel Dust', NOT 'smack', is a cure for writer's block!
Carey:
Hey, I understand a lot of us brothahs suffer thru a skanky PWT phase (We sawhree, Sistahs!). But, dude, no matter how 'low'...that we 'know'...that 'they'll' 'go', there comes a time when you have GOT to send those #@$&'s home! |
Anonymous
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Thank You Girl Writer
While was reading your post I laughed. I laughed because here we are discussing a "MOVIE"/ Script that I have created for no other reason than pure fun. However I am truely appreciative of your comments. I doubt if we would be having this conversation if you knew my real name. Accordingly I too probably would be just as surprised at your true identity. I am published, you have more than likely read one of my books. Are you published, to you have a novel or two. Your post conveyed the tone of a disciplined writer.
I enjoy Erasure immensely which lead me to this concept. However to produce a visable representation of this conception is a daunting task, do not let anyone tell you differently.
The writing of my character Mad Mama was simplified by viewing her posts. Her phraseology is congruent to my vision of an older opinionated southern black women that we all have witnessed. That being said, the other characters each pose their own set of problems, particularly, reference.
Even as I type I can't help but laugh at the time and seriousness this endeavor has garnered.
Do feel free to respond, in fact, I am looking forward to it.
Sincerely
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Anonymous
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ABM
Thank you my gracious wordsmith. As I've stated, I knew you would bounce with this. I was confident that you would not try to "detach" yourself from the character ABM.
We as a race are so quick to magnify the preceived negative of anothers works while unabashly giving advice. I can't help but wonder that if my indentiy would be revealed would the piece and the character's within , have received a different welcome from the cast.
As I mentioned, to write in a different style/form is difficult. I have to remove myself or better yet, forget about my technical training and let it go.
I am pleased that you are comfortable with my rendition of the postees he at Thumper's Corner.
Although I have not mentioned her, I believe Cynique is also taking it for what it is....fun.
After reading some of the replies, I am inclined to agree with Girl Writer. If I let the inhabitants write their roles, this "critical piece of literature" (lol) would most certainally be a bunch of wet dishrags .
I did have one fear. I thought Carey might ring me up and curse me out, telling me to write this ***Grabbing HIs Sack****. No Mad Mama, we are not talking about drugs .
Thanks again ABM.
BTW, has your wife bought any new clothes lately.....like drawwwaaals.  (that's the first giveaway) hahahaha
Yours Truely
W.
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Anonymous
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To Girl Writer: I didn't want you to think that I was poo-pooing your advice. After rereading your post your suggestion are valid and I will attempt to address them. Contrary to the beliefs of many, writing a piece of this nature is time consuming. I have a deadline on my next book that has at times taken a backseat to this project. As ABM so skillfully identified, the structure and dynamics of this "piece", still requires a bit of brain thrust. Consequently the installments takes time. Also I don't agree that the segments are to short. I am not writing a book, you have to give that some consideration.
Did I forget to tell you thanks for the positive statements, if I did....THANK YOU! Cliffhanger huh ***blushing*** "breezy, funny and sensationalized" ahh gosh *******lowering head in an embarrasing way *****
Thumper <<<wink>>>
Troy <<wink...wink>> |
Girl Writer
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As I stated, the MOVIE is "good" to me.
But if you posted much longer pieces...then people would be more apt to read them over and over again and they would become more invested/involved in the outcome.
The posts are too short. I forgot what's happening all ready. And the wait time for the next piece is too long.
I thought you already had the whole thing written?
Anyway, it's "good" to me so far. Lots of surprises with the characterizations.
As I said, you should just let your imagination run wild and have fun with it.
I'm certainly enjoying it.
But if you posted much longer pieces...then people would be more apt to read them over and over again and they would become more invested/involved in the storyline.
The way it is now--someone could read it, giggle and walk away from it for good.
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Of course, I'm a writer. **Lick/Lick**
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Anonymous
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As you know we are never satisfied. Although I may have material in the can, I can not resist dabbling with it. The story is evolving into a story within a story within a story. Don't be surprised if Chris is heard speaking of his contempt for his character. BTW, all the characters are NOT, are NOT that far removed fron the real person! Do you remember the Godfather segment when Marlon Brando informed his son that the individual that approached him in a certain way was actually the one to be suspicious of? Now I'm not saying that ABM's girl has stepped out.....but . Now I'm not saying that Chris has an Herion habit......but and I'm also not saying that Thumper and Linda are.....but . I'm certainally not saying that Cynique likes to......but . And lord knows Carey is too old to be chasing white girls.......but .......and by the way, would you care to give us a little bit of personal information about yourself . I need another female writer.
You are female and a writer are you not. **Lick/Lick** |
Anonymous
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By the way, fall out for detail **wink** |
Girl Writer
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But in real life, isn't ABM having an "internet affair" with Kola Boof? I think it moved to email, right? Or do you actually follow these boards? That was our soap opera around here before you came.
Yes, I'm a female writer--professionally--but a literary one. There's no other way to describe the content of my work.
But I've always had a streak of Jacqueline Susann deep inside that would love to get out. Not to mention the Joan Crawford and Mary Magdelene streaks.
I'm not a "white girl", though. If that's what you thought.
Fall out for detail?
Is that some kind of bending position or something?
And by the way. WHO are you? I say Kevin Powell.
I'm sure Troy and Thumper could tell you who I am. They know this computer like they know the back of their balls by now. I'm sure.
**Putting out cigar/naked in chair** "Roof Roof"
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Anonymous
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Troy and Thumper knows everyone! But I hope they.....No, I know they will not spoil the fun. If you did not get my "fall out" I missed the mark. Although I still believe I know who you are. But you will be sure to tell me if Althea comes by won't you.
Kevin Powell....Please.
btw, contrary to what most women believe, I've never seen the back of my balls.
**Sqeeeek.....watch out for that mouse** |
Girl Writer
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Before things get out of hand and I get in trouble, Anonymous.
I'm what Toni Morrison meant when she referred to certain "Outlaw Women" of today.
I'm not allowed anywhere.
I can't write for you and I can't talk to you anymore. Troy will be mad at me.
I will, however, read the soap. I think it's a lotta fun.
**Roof, Roof...lick, lick**
Don't forget to visit me in the kennel sometime.
I'm the one with the shiny coat and the diamond collar that nobody wants.
As Troy would say--"Peace".
And just for the record, I'm certain that ABM's a perfect gentleman--and not cheating on Crystal. He and Chris are my favorite characters in the whole soap...although I'm really starting to like Linda.
Now that's my kinda girl. <wink>
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Anonymous
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OK Linda we know it's you. Dont' worry. I'm sure Troy won't be angry at you for stepping out of your bizness role for a sec.
Great posts!
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ABM
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Hey! Can anybody tell me where to sign-up to get ah "lick/lick" by a Girl Writer?
I'll wait in line...
...Anybody?
Anonymous,
I think you bettah guard your 'sack' with dis here Girl Writer, Dame. Something tells me Baby Doll can swim in the deep end of the pool.
Bad Visual: ANYTHING pertaining to Troy/Thumper's "balls". YUCK! <<shakin'_head>>
Good Visual: Girl Writer doing the nude Monica Lewinski thing in an easy chair. (Hey lil gurl! Care to sample the contents of MY humidor? <<wink!>>) |
MAD MAMA
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Anonymous#2,
WYZ YOU TRYIN' TO PURTEN LIK YOU THE AUTHOR
AND IF IT WAS LINDA, DON'T BELEV IT IS, WHY YOU FEEL LIK YOU NEED TELL'IN.
YOUS A SNAKE. GET BACK UNDER THAT ROCK, YOU DONE CRAWL'D OUT FROM UNDER. DEM PEOPLES WAS A HAVE'IN THAYS OWN CONVERSATION AND YOU TRY'IN DA SPOIL THE FUN....YOU'S A SNAKE. WE ALL KNOW ABM BE PLAY'IN BUT YOU TRY'IN TO SOUND ALL SERIOUS. YOU SNAKE |
Carey
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Hello ABM & others
Since Girl Writer said I was too ahh, how'd she put it " too sophisticated, too high nosed to really comment" I thought I'd throw my liitle 2cents in the ring to disprove that comment. ABM, am going to have to agree with you, I lovin' the hell out this "MOVIE". You're right, it's riveting. I had to look up the word pathos but yeah it's that too . Anonymous did sucker punch you didn't he. I had no idea that's what the story was leading up to. I'm kinda jealous you have one of the leading roles. My character don't even have lines, what, he didn't pay his union dues, damn? But Chris, GAWD DAMN! I'll tell you what got me. The scenes describing his pain, was you feeling that, man, talking about anguish. Check them out: "he quickly awakened is a fit of confusion, accompanied by a sense of impending doom"..."The sockets of his eyes were sore, his legs ached, his back felt as if it couldn't support himself much longer"...."Death is now ann option"...."intellogence was no match against the isolating, brutally cold, depression latent, suicideinducing, dark moments of withdrawal".
Lord have mercy, that boy Chris was in trouble. AND it didn't stop there. "He is now smothered in quilt, fear, worry and dissolution". Damn ABM, I don't know about you but after reading that I ain't never gonna smoke another blunt again . ABM, come on man, as you said, JEEZ! DAYUM! AGAIN...Again y0ur shoutouts to Carey/Chris cracked me up..."Angel Dust, Not smack"....."you GOT to send those #@!$#&'s home! Man you're killin' me.
Yeah Anonymous got him one here, the humor and suspense are tight. And believe me, I tried to read it and not get involved but his storytelling is captivating ain't it.
After reading about Thump doing his thang, even my old behind was looking in wolf mode (lol). Yeah I'm with you man, Brotha has a gift, but you know what, I gather from reading his exchange between him an ol'wet Girl...I mean Writer Girl, I think he knows that. Do you have any idea what books he may have written in the past. What's your quess?
Anonymous: Don't you want us to read your other books?
He could be the author of some kind of educational stuff and is slippin' and slidin' around here slummin'. Yeah that's it
CArey
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Linda
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Sorry Anonymous . . . I'm just reading and enjoying your story like everyone else . . . I'm not Girl Writer. |
GOD
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Of course thats not you, Linda. It's Miss Kola a.k.a. Snake Nut who aint fool'n nobody's behind around here!
Even with a trench coat and dark glasses on, she forgets that some of us **eyebrow raised** can make out the shape and height no matter how she try to twist/slither it.
I went to your page on the site KOLA and saw your new book covers. AWWWWE aint' that nice. You finally got some books coming out. I guess you're all hot to promote them.
Just make sure you stay off THIS board, varmit. You've been warned before. It's not smart to bring a knife to a gunfight.
You said you're the shiny one down at the kennel with the diamond collar on? Well, b****
NO DOGS ALLOWED.
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Cynique
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WOW! God don't play, does He?? |
Anonymous
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"God"'s comments read more like veiled (self-)promotion. |
ABM
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GOD,
Uh...SIR? No disrespect intended. But I thought that YOU "...don't like 'ugly'."
Carey,
Yeah, I guess by Girl Writer's post, my commenting on Anonymous' thrilling tale mean that my reading talents are pretty lowbrow too. But, at least you could find the definition of "pathos". So maybe you are still somewhat "sophisticated". HAHAHA!!!
I have no idea who Anonymous is or what books he's written. But, like you, I would DEFINITELY feel compelled to read his works, if I haven't already. (JEEZ! I hope he ain't someone I have previously derided here.)
Anonymous really took aim at you and Chris. And believe it or not, I guess the masochist in me is slightly jealous that I'm not fighting the 'smack' monkey or don't get to wet nurse a 9-mm.
But hey! Considering the gloomy tone of this movie, maybe the shocking revelations of my ill son's paternity might drive me to hold up in a rat-infested motel with a case of Jack Daniels, a cache of tranvestite hookers and a grenade belt.
That's if I am lucky. HAHAHA!!!
And I was REALLY jealous about Thumper's getting' to work his mojo. But since these are his digs, if anyone deserves to get "paid" around here, I s'pose it's him. Though, I 'spect Thumps will have to contend with Yukio, the scorned/vengeful sapphite, b-4 this epic tale is done.
I am glad you enjoyed my commenting on the storyline (I hope Chris and others do as well.). Of course they are all intended to be good-natured and I hope they contribute to the fun. I welcome your commentary in kind. Like you, I tried but couldn't resist throwin' a few logs into this fire. Anonymous story has my amateur comedian sensor ringing likah mofo.
Heck! After reading his last installment, I was so wired I even had to try to ingratiate myself in his tête-à-tête with Girl Writer (Who herself seems like a hand & mouf' full.)
Oh, one more thing Carey. I suspect there's no need to fear. I'm thinking we're going to hear more about your ill-fated alter ego before long. There's just too much material about you for a writer who as skilled as Anonymous to ignore.
After all, he won't be able to resist filling us in on what 'you' were doing with the Caucasian hoochies brigade (pimpin'?...experimental dentistry?) . HEHEHE! |
anonymous2
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Transvestite hookers ABM?
Still angling for ways to get Kola cast I see.
LMAO!
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Kevin Ondine
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Miss Kola, if you should be reading this board, then I happen to think you are the most naturally beautiful woman author both in print and IN PERSON. I mean that from the bottom of my heart.
BTW, you've got the coolest web page on this site!
Don't forget to stop by. We love you Queen Kola!
Zahra's Books 'N Things
900 N. La Brea Ave.
Inglewood, CA 90302
310-330-1300 (voice)
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Nessa
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That goes for me, too, "Bola"! You rock, diva!
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Chris Hayden
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Anonymous:
I'm gonna find out who you are
Then I'm gonna out ya
Then the fun will begin |
Carey
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Chris
Come on Chris don't be an avaler, you might run away our cloaked scribe.
I'll tell you what, I'll be the smackman and you can be lying on a stretcher with a 9mm gunshot wound. Hey (light goes off) how did ABM know it was a 9mm weapon.....huuummm? Could he be the assailant? Could Carey be his wife's lover??? OH LORD!
Carey
Carey |
Carey
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Hello All
Just like Sis E. said, Kola has not set foot up in here for damn near a year and y'all keep bring up that womens name. Why don't you guys leave that women alone. Seems like a bunch of jealous haters (or promoters.... huuumm) to me.
Carey |
Anonymous
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Carey, if you believe that, then I got some prime waterfront property in Fla, just for you! If you read these boards long enough you'll pick up on styles of writing and expression. |
RED
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Anonymous, the point is. Kola has an enormous fan base, many of whom frequent this board. If people don't want her name mentioned, then they shouldn't resort to calling her drag queens, etc. which only riles up her fans.
I'm sure she herself probably reads these boards at times, and possibly even puts in her two cents. Perhaps she is "Girl Writer". But please tell me. What did she say as "Girl Writer" that should have illicited anything other than your appreciation for what she had to say? Not to mention, that she did not indicate she was Kola. However, the personal attacks against her started right up.
Which like Carey said, only keeps it going.
She's certainly more glamorous and exciting a figure than MOST "writer-type" people, wouldn't you agree? It's hard to mention her name just once and not talk about her. There's SO MUCH to talk about with a flamboyant persona like hers.
Maybe if people didn't so viciously refer to her as a "prostitute", "drag queen", "herpes victim" on these boards, then there wouldn't be the response of people like me. Not to mention, the woman IS a human being.
I have never seen any other poster on these boards being called a "prostitute", "drag queen" or "herpes" carrier. Kola is the only one I know of, and on top of that, she's the only person banned from posting on the board.
So what was the point you were trying to make?
Because I agree with Carey.
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RED
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Footnote:
I found out that Kola posts regularly at Keithboykin.com--a hugely popular "black gay" web site. She seems to be extremely popular with the guys over there.
Gays I've noticed are extremely protective of and vocal about their support of La Boof.
I don't think she's getting as much "promotion" as her fans just see her as being picked on all the time. She seems to be more than just an author. She's becoming a social figure and "activist". People are passionate about her.
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Carey
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Anonymous
Tell me a little something about that property am all ears!
btw, which Anonymous are you? I wish Troy would do like he thought about doing and dispose of the ability to use anonymous as a username. Nothing against you my girl but I noticed Chris and others also made mention to this in one of their posts and you know I've never liked it. See, it just confuses things. I doubt that you are our "MOVIE" scribe am I correct?? I mean what's so hard about picking a name, dang.....boo-boo, jojo, skinny neck, anything is better than getting your views mistakenly thought to be that of anothers....right or wrong.
I understand but don't totally/necessarily agree on your take concerning styles and expression BUT why do we even have to play that game??
Carey
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Anonymous
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RED, you more than proved my point. |
Cynique
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There were little hints and a certain undercurrent in the post by GOD which led me to believe that GOD wields quite a bit of authority on this board and, as such, has the prerogative to say what he pleases about his arch enemy Kola, with whom he has a running feud. |
Carey
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Now Now Cynique . |
Always Lurking
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I agree Cynique. "Anonymous" doesn't seem to know all the voices on the board. Otherwise, he would have known that "GOD" was not Kola.
LOL
I do agree with God that "Writer Girl" was Kola.
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Always Lurking
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Actually, Anonymous, you proved "RED'S" point.
Once you start talking about old Snake Girl, it turns into a fight and everybody jumps in. ROFL
Let me give you some background.
Just in case you don't know--Cynique, Linda and Thumper can't stand Kola's guts--ABM, Chris Hayden and Daniecia (who haven't seen in a while) not only adore her, they correspond with her regularly by email. ABM is her "boyfriend", in case you didn't know. I think Carey likes Kola too or she likes him, because she once said she thinks he's "cute" after he sent Kola his photo and she him a signed book. Kola also has Troy Johnson tucked tightly in her brassiere. There's a rumor that he's actually ABM and so that explains why Kola was the #1 bestseller on here for a whole year.
Now look at all the people who could be sticking up for Kola, not to mention the transients and you get the picture as to why we shouldn't mention her.
It's not "promotion" as much as....WARNING: Do Not Mention This Person's Name.
It takes on a life of its own.
SO LET IT GO, bud. And welcome to aalbc.com
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Cynique
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Come on now, Always Lurking, you got a little carried away. I don't hate Kola's guts. She's just too much of a drama queen for me. |
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